LinkedIn Job Search:True Story of a LinkedIn Letter that got Noticed!

One of my most popular workshops and career coaching topics is "LinkedIn Email Outreach Letters." Many people want to do this, but aren't sure how to navigate the technical intricacies and the etiquette.

Recently, I helped  a new, business client optimize his LinkedIn profile to attract employers. We optimized all the key sections based on his strengths and career goals. Then, we crafted a targeted LinkedIn Letter to a recruiter at one of his favorite companies. Below is the response to his letter (with the names changed for confidentiality). 

The recruiter was so impressed, that not only did she write back, she suggested a job match and encouraged him submit a resume directly. Plus, as you can see she was selling him on the benefits of working for this company!

Hi John,
Thank you for reaching out to me. My name is Kim Shield and I am the Recruiter at Zoros responsible for identifying candidates for Project Manager, Engineering role. This position will be based in Burlington, Vermont and your profile seems to be a match. If you’re interested in the position, please follow this link and send me your updated resume to my email,

If you want to be part of a global health care company that is making a difference and changing lives, Zoros may be the place for you. With a workforce of more than 30,000 worldwide, we can make a difference. We encourage you to visit our website to learn more about our unconventional culture, our approach to doing business and how we plan to set new standards in health care.
Thank you,


Below is my clients' response. He was interested in the company, and this was his first contact with one of the company recruiters. His stayed focused on his goal, but inquired about  2 other jobs they had posted on LinkedIn. Keep in mind that at this point it is a 2 way dialogue with the actual hiring manager. How different is this than a random job application. 


Thank you very much for reaching out to me about the Project Manager position at Zoros. I am very interested in working for the company and appreciate you taking the time to identify me as a potential candidate. Although I do believe that I would be a great candidate for the position, I was looking at 2 other open positions that may be a better fit at your company if they are still available: Director of Global Learning and the Senior Manager of Operations and Compliance. 

Please let me know if you are also responsible for identifying candidates for these positions. Once again, I appreciate the interest in my LinkedIn profile and hope that we can work together in the future. Please feel free to call me or email me with any questions or concerns. I look forward to hearing from you.

John Lakon

Next, the recruiter called my client directly and offered a phone screening interview.  My client passed and was promoted to 2 more rounds of interviews. In the end, he received an offer. Mission accomplished.

Happy job hunting! Keep me posted on your career progression. I'd love to hear your success stories...  

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  1. well i love your post its awesome for me. this job match and encouraged him submit a resume directly.

  2. This job hunting story seems like a fairy tale! It must be a great resume of the person that the recruiter got impressed instantly and arranged a phone screening interview. So I want to know what the essential things are one should do to get the high profile job like this. Before some years ago I was in a small to medium employee company which was good for me, but as per my qualification and experience I wanted to join in a big company. I cracked the interview in that big company but the compensation was little lower than my previous company. What should I supposed to do in this situation?

  3. I can attest that this is a true story of one of my job seekers. I worked with this job seeker to craft a great resume, targeted LinkedIn profile and brand. I'm sure that the recruiter viewed his online profile, education and experience and that is why he was contacted. Let me know if I can assist you with your job search. I offer virtual career services, by phone.

  4. Thanks a lot for sharing this successful experience! I think that it may inspire many people to use LinkedIn for their job search. I think that LinkedIn is a very strong professional network that provides job seekers with numerous opportunities. Unfortunately, some job seekers are lazy to use it or just don’t know how to fill all the fields in the profile properly. I’d recommend people looking for a job to find more here to get to know about effective tools that also help to make a job search successful.

  5. Linkedin.. I thought that this Linkedin is just another social network, but than i understood that this is for looking for new job. I was suspicious about a possibility that this website is even works, but after your post i think this is must be a way to find my dream job :D Thank you
    Maybe finally i would work as a writer. My number one job :)